This is my describing setting i have done threw out the week we had to pick a picture that we really liked and that we could describe and put on our blog we had to write down what we saw on a piece of paper and then write it into a story with descriptive words and then of course put it on to our chrome book.And blog it witch is what im doing right now i would love some feedback on what i could maybe do next time and what i could change and of course what you liked.
Hi Sapphire, I really like this picture its very magical looking, and has you wondering where the portal might take you. It makes me feel very calm and peaceful . I do wonder where your story would have ended up. Nice work
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Hi Sapphire (SS),
ReplyDeleteIts me Karaitiana (KK) from Wigram Primary school.
My favourite part about your story is the ending where you added in a AMAZING cliffhanger how you changed in a weird way. This makes me want to know more. I also liked your describing words that you used. They were awesome! This kinda reminds me of my story, when you hear a weird noise and it turns out there is a monster! Maybe next time you do a descriptive piece of writing you could use a Thesaurus so you dont have to use the same word over and over again.Are you making another part to your story?
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